Wherever this came from, it's FULL of energy.
Really quite amazing, how you do that. <3

Sometimes, we can't help, and I know it hurts, but know that the rest of us are here for you.

A good morbid poem does the body wonders, and the mind as well. Well done. c:

T w T; Thank you so much, hun. I'm glad you think this piece has energy--I'd like to hope it at least has emotion. = x = <3

-A.C.

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No matter how subtle the wizard, a knife between his shoulderblades will seriously cramp his style.
-- Vlad Taltos (Writer: Steven Brust)

Jeez.
This entire thing is just one devastatingly beautiful blow after another. It brings you mentally to your knees in the best possible way.
Also I just have a THING for needle/IV imagery, possibly because nothing scares me more on the face of the whole damn planet. (Except for spiders, planes and clowns. ._. Write a poem about all four in one, and I guarantee ye I'll have nightmares, and love the hell out of it. xD) And ye did this really, really effectively.

I love the disjointed-ness of it all. It keeps you off-balance and off-kilter and unsure, until the words are the only thing to hold onto.

"lying back on bleached covers
as the IV screws you
over and over and over again
your Drip is life,
keep letting it sink in"

= Best words I've read all week. Keep this up, please, and thank you for sharing this with us. And for goodness' sake, don't scrap it! xD Or rather - do, if ye really feel ye want to, it's yers and yers alone, but I think it's wonderful in that horrid sort of way. <3

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[Writing is a matter of finding the appropriate balance between dinosaurs and sodomy.] -Michael Swanwick

|]; thanks as always for your support.
And I'd like to hope so. ;; I just get so anxious and let things get to me. But thank you!

-A.C.

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No matter how subtle the wizard, a knife between his shoulderblades will seriously cramp his style.
-- Vlad Taltos (Writer: Steven Brust)

This is one of the best comments I've gotten in such a long time from a new reader! T w T thank you so much--to know that you found it both beautiful and emotionally moving is such a blessing to me.
And I hear you! 8\ I have phobias with ALL of those, dang! When I was little, I misbehaved at the circus and my father threatened to sell me to the clowns. :'x been scared of them ever snce.
I'm very pleased you liked the disjointed quality of the poem. = w = it means a lot to me.
I'm also glad those words resonated with you. Thank you for sharing your insight. I don't think I will scrap it. XD Thanks for all the compliments, I'm so flattered!

-A.C.

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No matter how subtle the wizard, a knife between his shoulderblades will seriously cramp his style.
-- Vlad Taltos (Writer: Steven Brust)

Aww, yer so very welcome! When I read something I really like, I can't NOT write out exactly what I think of it! And I'm a strong believer in that, if somebody makes or writes something ye like, TELL THEM! Because far too many artists/writers/musicians/creators never get TOLD if they make something really neat, so they never know anyone likes it, and then they stop, and the world has suffered a real loss then! n-n SO. YAY!

@_@ OH DEAR FORD. Sell you to clowns? Poor baby! That's seriously... horrific. Agh. I can see why that would be traumatizing for life! When I was a kid, there was this creepy little clown nightlight in my grandparents' house, and I would always hate going to visit them because in the guest bedroom, they would always insist on putting in that damn nightlight, and it was just... GRINNING at me in the dark, GLOWING, all DEMONIC-LIKE. Think that's what started it!

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ETERNALLY EPIC HAIKU: Ask Sylver! [link] WISDOM OF THE UNIVERSE AWAITS YE!

[Writing is a matter of finding the appropriate balance between dinosaurs and sodomy.] -Michael Swanwick

THIS IS SO AWESHUMM! wow.
i think you really managed to capture the way we're all infected by modernity.
amazing.

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I wish Life was simple, like a retro pop song. I want you to want me. BAM!
I wish Life was simple. Like in a teen movie. Boy meets girl and they live in their own little world.

"I go to seek a Great Perhaps." ~ Francois Rabelais

;; I didn't even know modernity was a word! XD; thanks very much.

-A.C.

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No matter how subtle the wizard, a knife between his shoulderblades will seriously cramp his style.
-- Vlad Taltos (Writer: Steven Brust)